Thamks to Karin Gustafson and dVerse for the ‘Undercurrents’ prompt. This is my first response to one. Thank you to the online poetry community as a whole for making me feel so welcome and inspiring me to continue writing.
she asked me in
asked me to stay
her skin was soap and fresh flowers
her cup was life’s soil and rain
I knelt before her
drank of her fountain
and tasted Earth’s death and resurrection
she asked me in
asked me to stay
I tested the water
she pushed at my caution until
I pulled at my trunks and
cannonball!
I splashed until I was spent and
we both went to sleep
wet beneath thin clouds of contentment
I had never swam as hard
nor as fast
before her
she never asked
I didn’t stay
xtraordinarypoems 
I love your repeat lines in this.
Under these highly charged erotic circumstances I cannot imagine why she did not ask and you did not stay…but then I am very naive when it comes to undercurrents of the matters of the heart…or maybe that’s it…there’s no heart in it at all….I like this
lusty thought provoking poem.
Oh dear–this is very strong and sad, so erotic and then the harsh surprise. Well done. K.
oh my goodness…need to open a window..powerful erotic write here with great images, very tastefully done…i think you should’ve stayed anyway…sometimes the action speaks louder than words…just saying…smiles
Wow this is a quick glimpse into a relationship that has a surprise ending. Well done Hines, and we are glad you are continuing your time within the poetry community!
Christy
A comedy of manners with true feeling thrown in? Whatever, sad and delightful at the same time.
Thanks everyone.
For the record, we slept beneath those thin clouds for a year. We and the contentment dried, the sun shone through, and I got burned. We both did.
(Not too terribly though, and we’ve healed.)
🙂
Such is life. Sometimes every good-bye is gone. At least there were good memories. 🙂
wonderful descriptions and intense cadence in this. nicely written.
fun and frantic and then despondent – all very fine … nicely done
Wow, excellent poem, so glad to have had the privilege of reading it.
Wow. Why didn’t I read this the last time I was here? This is all the more powerful in imagery for what it doesn’t spell out. I really like it. Well done.
Thank you so very much.